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moon-eyed girlDown on market street there sits amoon-eyed girl
moon-eyed girl. Her skin is white as snow or death and her lips are chafed flesh, hanging loosely over the crevice that is her mouth. Her hair is moldy bread, and frailer than a body
ten winters in the grave.
Walking by, you or I might turn up our noses because the moon-eyed girl smells like thursday's fish market trash; or perhaps because what if she jumps?
But I guess that's because you or I don't know about her poor daddy or the time she had to run


as the lastI need to write something pretty about nature or maybe just selfs, but whatever it is it must be written and it must be mine. So perhaps I'll put down how the sun leaks its daysmiles every evening on the ocean near my house. It drips and bleeds all its water colors and spreads out across the horizon.as the last
And i love it.
Or perhaps I'll write about wrapping up in a blanket -- a warm one that is soft and feels
almost as if it could be arms holding in the heat. I'll writ
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Why don't you join the poetry contest from [link] ?
It's free and every nitwit such as myself who enters gets a small gift
but someone like you might win one of their $10 000 or $100 000 prizes.
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Sherghan
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Life's like a box of chocolates. Eat all the good ones and toss out the crap.
It was taken exactly by catching direct sunlight...
If carefully used, this can give a great effects (as you can see there and on "Hope Rising II",
I didn't knew about this sensors damage, it is posible I think. For the first time, happy to be using Analog
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Sherghan
Member of: ~polska
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Extend your groove baby.
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Please God... give me detention with Professor Snape... ^.^ *rickmaniacs
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....caught in that sensual music, all neglect monuments of unageing intellect....
--Yeats
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I figured this may interest you, considering the first thing you did with your camera
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Extend your groove baby.
I've read through:
Broken Little Girl
A Search Through the Years
An Oddly Tale
I think the 3rd piece was the most interesting, and I'm glad to see you playing so much with sound, structure, allusion, and metaphor. You lose a bit in the imagery, which in the two other pieces is your strength, but the content and form in "An Oddly Tale" is inventive and shows growth.
The main thing I can recommend is to keep playing around with structure and with sound. Also play with the content more. By that I mean the imagery, metaphors, etc. Also, watch your punctuation. I see potential in your work, and I think that if you just keep writing and trying to growth within your writing, you'll be doing great.
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At your service.
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want to recomment? have a look at _reposeful or _clouds or ~pm-grafix
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And you pick up a water gun to join in the fight!
RULES:
You must shoot at least 5 people.
You CAN shoot the person that shot you!
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*snores as teacher drones on* Teacher: Kids-- when a whale drops out of the boat and drops through the water and lands in a minefield, hitting one mine with a blast radius of four hundred feet, what is the chances the boat will explode? Me: "WHAT? WTF?!"
im also glad we were able to chill it was nice we should do it more often
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"we are all in the world together yet so alone all the same"-LBG
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Speak softly and carry a big stick; you will go far.
Valdonis
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You should've gone to China, you know, 'cause I hear they give away babies like free iPods. You know, they pretty much just put them in those t-shirt guns and shoot them out at sporting events.
~Juno
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....caught in that sensual music, all neglect monuments of unageing intellect....
--Yeats
My club:
~disPOSABLEteens
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You should've gone to China, you know, 'cause I hear they give away babies like free iPods. You know, they pretty much just put them in those t-shirt guns and shoot them out at sporting events.
~Juno
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....caught in that sensual music, all neglect monuments of unageing intellect....
--Yeats
My club:
~disPOSABLEteens
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You should've gone to China, you know, 'cause I hear they give away babies like free iPods. You know, they pretty much just put them in those t-shirt guns and shoot them out at sporting events.
~Juno
i'll have to see.
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There are only four questions of value in life, Don Octavio. What is sacred? Of what is the spirit made? What is worth living for? What is worth dying for?
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....caught in that sensual music, all neglect monuments of unageing intellect....
--Yeats
My club:
~disPOSABLEteens
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